Script Doctor


Clarify and enhance your film or theater script.

This service is for scripts needing a seasoned writer / director / actor / newsletter and copy editor to give you feedback, as well as concrete suggestions for improvements.

I fix spelling, punctuation, and grammar. I look for plot holes, lost plot threads, and character consistency. I check for lengthy descriptions of camera angles and POV minutia, that can be converted into brief notes, and into the more useful, and meaningful, character dialogue.

I can suggest a log line for the script.

I read your script and tell you things your film and theater pals wouldn’t dare tell you.
Such as:

  • “What is the motivation for this person to get completely undressed?”
  • “The characters’ desperation needs to be expressed in the dialogue, not a stage direction.”
  • “There is a plot thread missing: Whatever happened to Baby Jane?”
  • “This character is far too inconsistent, or is this a remake of ‘The Three Faces of Eve?’ ”
What I do is make sure your script is a very good speculation script, which would inspire producers, investors, directors, DPs, and cast members to attach to your project.

Formats:

  • MS Word - I can make comments in the document - or text can be changed directly for grammar spelling and format.
  • PDF (Acrobat) - Your original text will not be changed, but comments can be made directly pointing to the text.
  • Sophocles (script formatting) - I will export the text and make comments in a Word document.
  • Final Draft 5 (script formatting) - I will export the text and make comments in a Word document.
  • Paper script - Mark-up is done directly to the script, which is then returned to you.
I read the script through once before making any suggestions. On subsequent readings, the comment process depends on the type of document you send me. For a Word document, I indicate deletions with a line-through — which looks like this: old text — and yellow marking indicating the replacement text.

Details:

  • Rate: $4 a page.
  • Send check or money order: Box 9685, Seattle, WA 98109-0685.
  • Sending your script attached to an e-mail: demian@buddybuddy.com
  • If you send a paper script, please enclose a self-addressed, stamped envelope.
Scripts “Doctored” by Demian
These scripts received extensive comments, or were fully edited:

Features

  • Bill Flannigan
          “The Clear Horizon” (short version was “Jimmy Ritz”)
  • Kelly Abbott (Bursting Universe Productions)
          “Going Straight”
  • Phil Teller (AddTell LLC)
          “The Car Passenger”
          “Lowe’s Hardware”
          “Taco Time”
          “Valerie Martin”
  • Ray Woodall (Graphic Cypher Productions)
          “Bar Scene”
          “Daydreamin’”
          “Shadow Castle”
          “The Turncoat”
    Ray Woodall also wrote “The Silent One.”
    He is available as a writing mentor and may be reached via
    Graphic Cypher: 253-854-0877 — or c/o demian@buddybuddy.com
Theater
  • Jimmy Rosenfield
          “The Genius and the Goddess”
          “The King’s Glory”
          “Michelangelo and Tommaso”
          “The Queen’s Bastard”
          “Romeo in St. Petersburg”
          “Semper Fidelis”
Corporate
  • AmKor Pharma - Robert Abbott
          VNR on phase 1 trials.
  • PATH (Program for Appropriate Technology & Health) - Chris Ellias
          Welcoming greeting for in-house production.

Film/Video Scripts Written by Demian
Produced In Production In Pre-Production

Theater Scripts Written by Demian
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About Sweet Corn

“Sweet Corn Productions is devoted to highly entertaining presentations that affirm self-esteem and social equality.” - Demian, director
Founded by Demian in 1971, Sweet Corn Productions has developed and produced a broad range of video, film and radio drama, as well as live productions and workshops throughout New England, in San Francisco and Seattle. Steve Bryant served as music director from 1982 to 2002.

Demian, has been a Photographer, Filmmaker, and Videographer since 1965. He has experience photographing drama, dance, mime, music, interviews, and documentaries. Demian has a doctorate in education, and is available for a free, initial consultation about your project, suggesting the most cost-effective technical solution.
Call Demian at 206-935-1206 to discuss how
Sweet Corn can serve your needs.
 
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